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Post by Eric T. Jones on May 3, 2005 23:29:20 GMT -5
Just remember, Kevin, that this is my movie. I'll most likely be liberal with the script you're writing, but that doesn't mean I won't make slight changes. I have a plot structure, and that IS going to be the one used in this movie.
Keep in mind, however, that I'll probably hand those revisions down to Richie. This is because I owe him for that shitty dialogue wash I did with "Fight Movie 3".
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Post by iblvinathgcldlv on May 6, 2005 20:41:19 GMT -5
that would be VERY ironic, seeing as kevin jumps to use ANY gun
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Post by bluesabre1 on May 6, 2005 20:52:01 GMT -5
Zombiis II: Holy Shit, They Made the Sequel!
Fade from Black
Some dark piano tones echo through the background. The camera gently shifts through trees. We pan around continuing through the moody credits montage. Finally it stops and settles on the quiet forest scene. Then a Zombii unleashes an unearthly scream out from ff shot and lunges at the camera. Hold on black.
Int. The Commons Clubhouse-Fireplace room
A ragtag military force with misshapen clothes and fake-looking gear crowd the couch. Their general sits on a table, pistol in pocket, papers in hand.
General Thanes Soldier. This is an odd time in our lives. A time when justifiable things seem out of place and confusion is an all too common thought process.
Private Harner And that’s why you called us here, eh?
Thanes Shut up, I’m talkin’. Now, as I was sayin’ I have gathered you here to fulfill a strange request. My dearest friends, two brothers, were captured and eaten alive by what I believe to be…Zombiis.
Shifty gazes around. The soldiers fidget.
Thanes Now, I’m not crazy. I know what I’m talking about when I say it. Before they stopped their contact with me they were attempting to raise an army of the undead.
Private Hagardy Why?
Thanes Because they thought they could. And they did. They must have. And these Zombiis must be stopped before they escape the forest!
Private Sardy Sir, er, Kevin, we’ve got plastic guns. We’re not even old enough to use real guns. And you want us to go into the forest and shoot at the Undead?
Thanes We’ve got to try. Our weapons may not be of the highest caliber, but are spirits are. Are you with me men!
(Silence around)
Thanes I said, do you have anything better to do today!
Company (In Unison) No, Sir!
Thanes Are you with me!
Company (In Unison) Sure!
Forest- Midday
Sun peaks through the trees. Two figures clad in black rags stumble through the woods. We hear their cries from several distances. We see their faces, smudged in dirt and bloody filth. One grunts. They halt. They sniff and paw at each other. In the distance, a boy is walking, minding his own business. The Zombiis dart into the trees, screaming their inhuman growl.
Int. Clubhouse- Sauna/Militia Armory
Private Harner Sir, the soldiers are equipped. We’re ready to initiate operation Zombii Asskicking on your command.
General Thanes Excellent. Proceed to phase 2. Load the vehicles… It’s Zombii season. <-(Potential tagline)
Ext. Forest- Midday
The shot is filled with pedestrian’s footsteps. A screech, the camera jerks away to show him being attacked and preyed upon by the Zombiis. The shot ends with the characteristic Zombii scream.
Ext. Forest
Our crew jumps out of the vehicle, weapons in hand.
General Thanes Let's lock and load gentlemen!
In unsion, the crew makes a gun loading noise as they pretend to load their weapons.
Int. Forest
The Zombiis are on the prowl. One sniffs. Hisses. They hide.
Int. Forest entrance- Late afternoon
The sqaud moves through the forest with stealth.
Private Harner Sir?
Thanes Yeah. (Signals to stop)
Harner When are we gonna kill stuff?
Thanes Soldier, it's been twenty minutes. This is the time for quiet, mental preparation before the storm. That said, I think we should split up.
Sardy That 's suicide!
Thanes Don't question my plot advancement! Sardy you're coming with me. Harner and Hagardy, scout the positions to our left and right respectively. Report in every 5 minutes with a tone. (holds up walkie-talkie) Move!
Everyone skampers off in their given directions.
In RE fashion, let's keep the camera third person over the shoulder. Harner gets attacked by a Zombii first. It comes up from behind him, knocks him to the ground. Then Harner is killed from the camera perspective of the barrel of the gun!
Meanwhile, back with Thanes and Sardy
Thanes Come on Sardy, you're a man. These are just some zombified sissies. (I wanted to write pussies, but I figure this is censored)
Sardy But Zombiis are people too.
Thanes Shush. Liberal.
Suddenly, the second Zombii leaps out from behind the cover of trees. Thanes fires, The Zombii is hit, but shakes it off. (Pause the film and INSERT TITLES: Plot flaw: the guns are plastic, so how could it hurt the Zombii?) (Logical response: Quiet. Watch the movie.) Then it leaps, pushing over Sardy. Thanes knocks the Zombii over, it hisses and quiets.
Sardy You killed one sir.
Thanes The hell I did!
Thanes shoots at the Zombii a few more times.
Thanes Private. Never shoot a Zombii just once. They always come back to bite you in the ass.
Sardy Yes sir! Hey, I'm going to go call Hagardy and Harner, tell 'em what just happened.
Thanes Wait, that one came from the left.
Sardy He could have missed it. (Into walkie-talkie) Harner , come in.
Thanes No, the Zombiis track the scent of humans. It would have gottern to him first.
Sardy I'm not getting Harner sir.
Thanes Noooooooooooooooooo!
Int. Forest- late afternoon
Hagardy is walking back quickly.
Hagardy (Into walkie-talkie) This is Private Hagardy here. I just heard some gunfire and I am reporting back.
From off shot we here the echoes of "Nooooooooooo!"
Hagardy Shit shit shit shit shit. Do you guys copy over there? Is everything okay? Over?
Static over the walkie talkie line. Then a response from Sardy
Sardy (from walkie talkie) Everything is alright where we are. But over there you seem to be kind of...
(a screech from off in the distance)
Hagardy What, they're actually out there? The threat is real?
Sardy John. They're coming for you.
A zombii darts through the trees back on Hagardy’s side of the forest. Hagardy starts walking quickly.
Hagardy How many of them are out there?
Sardy We don’t know. Thanes and I are going to move towards your position.
Hagardy is ambushed. He kills one, but then two more emerge from the trees. Another one comes from behind. We cut back to Thanes and Sardy after we hear the characteristic screech of death.
Int. Forest- Clearing
Thanes This is it. Pistol loaded?
Sardy Yeah.
Thanes stops. Sardy stops just a little bit behind him.
Sardy Why’d you stop?
Thanes They’ll come for us. Right now we wait.
Hissing from the trees. We hear more hissing. Silence. A bird chirps. An insect twitters. Leaves rustle in the wind. Thanes takes out his Uzis. Sardy clears his throat. A zombii walks out into the clearing. Thanes gestures Sardy to wait. More Zombiis walk out. They approach the hiding spot, branching out to surround them.
Sardy You shoot, I run. Plan?
Thanes We both shoot.
Thanes grabs Sardy’s Uzi and unleashes a torrent of bullets.
Thanes Move!
Sardy and Thanes run. And run. A Zombii jumps out from behind a tree, grabs Sardy and drags him behind a tree. Thanes wheels around.
Thanes Sardy!
The hiss. Thanes runs. Cue music. Thanes runs and shoots behind him. From all directions. More hissing through the trees. Soon the Uzis run dry, he drops them. Thanes stops. Tired and hot, he removes his jacket. Zombiis come out from behind the trees.
Thanes You’ll never take me alive…Zombii scum!
The Zombiis close into Thanes.
Thanes Come on girls. I can take you.
One of the Zombiis lunges for Thanes. Thanes takes out a pistol. Bang! One. Another shot. Two. Some jump him. Thanes is overwhelmed.
Fade to black.
A shot of Harner
A shot of Hagardy
A shot of Sardy.
A shot of Thanes.
A shot of the walkie talkie with Harner. A voice come in through the frequency.
Emergency Support This is City Support. We’ve heard some screaming from the forest. We’re sending some emergency vehicles. Please hold on just a little longer. The Zombii hiss.
Fade to black. Roll Credits.
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Post by Eric T. Jones on May 6, 2005 21:02:37 GMT -5
Obviously, none of you were listening to me. The film opens where they discover a videotape containing footage from the original "ZOMBI!!!". The group of commandos analyses the tape at their "command base" (somewhere with a TV), and one person replays it and points out an alleged logo on the zombi's T-shirt, possibly leading to a company which "manufactures" these zombis. Then they go in the forest (one stays, radioing the leader (Kevin) occasionally from base), and then there's the zombi combat.
"Operation Zombiasskicking"... I like that!
Haha, "Load the vehicles... it's Zombii season". This one isn't going to be such a large-scale film, though; I'll possibly use some of this material for "ZOMBIE!!!", which I want to involve more people and be a larger-scale production.
This one's simply a group of amateurs and wannabes heading in the forest, thinking they can fire a gun, and fight zombis.
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Post by bluesabre1 on May 6, 2005 21:18:06 GMT -5
Make your changes as you see fit. I'll keep on writing and you can keep on changing. The only real difference is our opening. However I wanted to try and avoid anything Resident Evilesque. I must spend the rest of the night thinking of scary ways for our characters to engage in combat. My objective is to try and keep the film scary through tension. Never have to fire a gun in shot. Break everyone up, keep the Zombiis hidden, prowling. Blood thirsty. Creepy camera-work, creepy actors. I need someone who can make an inhuman howl. More so than the cheesy shouting in the original Zombis.
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Post by Eric T. Jones on May 6, 2005 21:20:16 GMT -5
Geez, again, NOBODY LISTENS TO ME! That's what I WANT, is a Resident-Evil-esque type of movie! At least for this one, that's what I want! And Noxin's zombi noises were perfect- next time he comes to California, I'm gonna have him record zombi noises so I can put them in post, as I know most of our extras won't be able to do those for shit.
Maybe in "ZOMBIE!!!", but right now, it's "ZOMBIS!!!", and I've BEEN saying what I want. Remember, this is MY movie!
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Post by bluesabre1 on May 6, 2005 21:32:25 GMT -5
Yes master, as you wish. As your humble writing slave, I will comply. From now on, Resident Evilesque all the way.
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Post by Eric T. Jones on May 6, 2005 21:42:17 GMT -5
On the other hand, I've rethought, and a compromise-
Experiment with the horror-ifics on this one, but remember, don't use 'em all- "ZOMBIE!!!" should have the lot of 'em. However, I still intend this one to be "Resident Evil"-esque. I've sort of worked up something for "ZOMBIE!!!" (mostly on how big-of-scale I want this to be- I have a protest scene planned (spoofing anti-war protests) and an anti-protester propaganda TV ad (spoofing the anti-protester crowd); the protest doesn't have to be THAT big, but I want signs people are holding up)
The more elaborate army customs will be reserved for "ZOMBIE!!!"; just remember that "ZOMBIS!!!" involves a squad amateur commando wannabes.
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Post by bluesabre1 on May 6, 2005 22:29:26 GMT -5
Good. The writing slave is pleased. He will continue his labors with diligence.
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Post by LordBob on May 6, 2005 22:54:46 GMT -5
MrMan and I have some guns, two machine gun/oozees, a orange capgun, tons of pirate guns from disneyland.... I think there is more that I don't know about....
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Post by Eric T. Jones on May 6, 2005 23:00:56 GMT -5
Possibly the machine guns and uzis; despite the amateur commandos involved, I'd still like the film to say it's using realistic weapons. It's not a 100% pure absurd film- just one that supposedly takes itself seriously yet has camp value in it.
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Post by bluesabre1 on May 7, 2005 18:39:18 GMT -5
Draft 1 of th Zombii 2 script is complete! Eric, please copy and paste my script to word, make your changes and repost. After that I'll make my changes to dialogue as I feel appropriate and the Zombii 2 script will be complete.
Oh, and Eric, please change Sardy to Barns. I like that name more.
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Post by kenny on May 7, 2005 21:54:28 GMT -5
Hey, I thought I was writing this. Bluesabre, your script really isnt that good. (Cace in point: In the script, you refer to me as "kevin." Dont set me off AGAIN.)
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Post by bluesabre1 on May 7, 2005 22:41:22 GMT -5
You spelled case wrong. And Eric and I discussed your writing of the script this morning. Eric and I will handle the script. In my defense for it not being very good I must say it's only draft one and does not completely meet all of Eric's requirements. Fitting these would change the first scene, the weakest scene in my opinion. And if you don't like it, feel free to make specific suggestions.
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Post by Eric T. Jones on May 8, 2005 1:18:18 GMT -5
But remember one major point- these guys are amateurs, NOT professional soldiers. They're wannabes, so they don't have vehicles and crap. Their "communications" is merely the commander's walkie-talkie to a "base" that's someone's TV room.
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